Wednesday, February 25, 2009

3 Word Wednesday & 55 Flash Fiction Friday

The prompts this week for 3WW were Callous, Persistent, and Interfere. Again I am writing my story in 55 words so I can use it for 55FFF.


She’s interfering in my life. My callous remarks yesterday should’ve stopped her bitching, but she doesn’t hear me. I have a job, dancing. My boss thinks I’m 18, but …….not for two more years.
She’s so persistent, wanting me back at school…….boring! She wants me to be a banker, to be a failure like her.

14 comments:

Wendy Naisa said...

Dead good! I'll have to have a go at the 55 thingy!

Love that final sentence!

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Tumblewords: said...

Great flash!

susan said...

And dancing is success? ;> A short-lived career, but when you're young, who's thinking long-term. Thanks for the read.

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

Dead-on. I love it.

lime said...

oh my, so much emotion packed into a mere 55 words. so much of a story. well done!

g-man said...

Redheels...
I used to work in a juvenile prison on the girls wing. I've seen a hundred stories like this. Sadly, it ain't fiction!
Excellent 55 once again my dear.
Thank you so much for visiting and playing. Have a Wonderful Week-End!
Galen

Reverend Michael Kilgore said...

I have 2 girls and could hear that coming out of their mouths! Isn't it amazing how much smarter we are at 16 than we are at 40?

By the way...I love red heels! mines up...

Akelamalu said...

Very poignant and a very common scenario. Great writing.

Mary said...

This is so scary as a parent. Well written.

Eaton Bennett aka Berenice Albrecht said...

Interesting how young people appraise an older person's life. What is a success to one is not to another. Nice 55! :)

Passionate Fiction

myrtle beached whale said...

These days a stripper has much more credibility and respect than a banker.

Michelle said...

Interesting twist on what one considers true success, ironic too, with all the recent talk of bank failures!

Pam said...

wow, rh...that was a great 55. i can totally envision this story.

Lulda Casadaga said...

It's your life...your choices...your ups & downs...live & learn! No one can make you do anything sista :) Nice 55.